Pattie, if you would be comfortable pitching the intro before Meagan's boards that would be great. You have a strong voice that is beautiful for pitching.
Intro:
Hello my name is …(presenters) and we represent Group 2.
Our story is about a young boy who is, at first, reluctant
and apprehensive to learn at a new school, but is soon inspired in a
collaborative, futuristic learning environment. Our group explored the idea of integrating holograms as
tactile problem solving to organize inspiring lessons based on 2nd grade
math, spelling, and science.
We have some new storyboards based on some changes you
suggested last week. We have introduced a teacher who utilizes these holograms
to direct her lesson plans and inspire students. The holographic lesson plans are meant to not only support the teacher, but also inspire a collaborative work environment between the students.
We have some updated story boards to show, as well as some vis dev for the teacher, main character, supporting 2nd grade characters, and updated classroom designs.
Great stuff Ashley! The only little fix I'd suggest is swapping "some" for "the" in the first sentence of the third paragraph. So it would read, "We have some new storyboards based on THE changes you suggested last week."
ReplyDeleteOh, yeah totally! Thanks Andrew.
ReplyDeleteAlso, from the group meeting Keith was mentioning the Adobe people wanted to see the classroom desk set-up different and more futuristic. I mentioned the desks were folding into the floor, but we might consider stating the contrast we are creating in the boards: from seeming a sterile, common classroom in the beginning to the inspiring holographic classroom in the end.
Sounds good.
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